The line graph shows the changes in the populations of six different areas of the world between 1960 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart
illustated
the development Correct your spelling
illustrates
illustrated
about
the Change preposition
of
number
of people in sic different spaces between 1960 and 2010. Overall
all
Correct determiner usage
the
population
had been increaseing
Correct your spelling
increasing
since
1960 to 2010. Change preposition
from
Furtherermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
Sub-Saharan
Africa, South Asia
, and
East Correct word choice
apply
Asia
and Pccific
have Correct your spelling
Pacific
shows
Change the verb form
shown
dramatic
rise. Add an article
a dramatic
In
addition
South Add a comma
addition,
Asia
is
the highest Verb problem
has
population
compared to other
five areas.
Correct article usage
the other
In1960
, the Correct your spelling
In 1960
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
population
of Sub-Saharan
Afuca
was lower than Europe and Central Correct your spelling
Africa
Asia
around 250 millions
. And Change to singular
million
Asia
's population
over
two times higher at around 750 Add a missing verb
is over
millions
. Change to singular
million
Furthermore
Add a comma
Furthermore,
Sub-Saharan
Africe
region Correct your spelling
Africa
had
Wrong verb form
has
also
been increased in Change the article
a number
the number
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
population
over Add an article
the population
ther
years since 1960. In 2010, the Correct your spelling
the
number
of people in Sub-Saharan
Africa was higher than Europe
and Central Change preposition
in Europe
Asia
. At around 750 millions
. Change to singular
million
While
the number
of Europe and Central Asia
was stablised
in Correct your spelling
established
stabilised
this
Correct determiner usage
these
fiveteen
years.
Correct your spelling
fifteen
Although
the chart shows notable
increase Correct article usage
a notable
inhabitants
in East Change preposition
in inhabitants
Asia
and Pacific and South Asia
, North America and Middle East and North Africa were
slightly rose. Inhabitants of East Unnecessary verb
apply
Asia
and Pacific
had always Correct article usage
the Pacific
highest
compared to other region areas. Since 1100 in 1960 Correct article usage
the highest
and
rose to almost Correct word choice
apply
around
2500 Rephrase
apply
millions
in 2010. Change to singular
million
In other words
, the population
had grouped over three times in 2010.Submitted by jcafe2177 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, population, sub-saharan, asia, millions with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
▼