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The line graph shows the changes in the populations of six different areas of the world between 1960 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the populations of six different areas of the world between 1960 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart
illustated
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illustrates
illustrated
 the development
about
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of
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 the
number
 of people in sic different spaces between 1960 and 2010.
Overall
all
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the
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population
 had been
increaseing
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increasing
since
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from
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 1960 to 2010.
Furtherermore
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Furthermore
Sub-Saharan
 Africa, South
Asia
,
and
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apply
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East
Asia
 and
Pccific
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Pacific
 have
shows
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shown
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dramatic
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a dramatic
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 rise.
In
addition
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addition,
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 South
Asia
is
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has
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 the highest
population
 compared to
other
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the other
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 five areas.
In1960
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In 1960
, the
number of
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apply
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population
 of
Sub-Saharan
Afuca
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Africa
 was lower than Europe and Central
Asia
 around 250
millions
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million
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. And
Asia
's
population
over
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is over
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 two times higher at around 750
millions
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million
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.
Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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Sub-Saharan
Africe
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Africa
 region
had
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has
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also
 been increased in
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a number
the number
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number of
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apply
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population
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the population
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 over
ther
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the
 years since 1960. In 2010, the
number
 of people in
Sub-Saharan
 Africa was higher than
Europe
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in Europe
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 and Central
Asia
. At around 750
millions
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million
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.
While
 the
number
 of Europe and Central
Asia
 was
stablised
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established
stabilised
 in
this
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these
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fiveteen
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fifteen
 years.
Although
 the chart shows
notable
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a notable
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 increase
inhabitants
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in inhabitants
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 in East
Asia
 and Pacific and South
Asia
, North America and Middle East and North Africa
were
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apply
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slightly rose. Inhabitants of East
Asia
 and
Pacific
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the Pacific
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 had always
highest
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the highest
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 compared to other region areas. Since 1100 in 1960
and
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apply
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rose to almost
around
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apply
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2500
millions
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million
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 in 2010.
In other words
, the
population
 had grouped over three times in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, population, sub-saharan, asia, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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