More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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It is prevalent that the existence of several wild animals
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on the edge of extinction, and some of them have
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as
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endanger
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species
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. I think, the reason
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that situation lies
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the
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habitat
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loss and
over exploitation
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by humans.
However
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, by ruling
a
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strict regulations,
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problems can be tackled effectively. The first reason is, a massive
habitat
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loss
that is
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caused by human
activities
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.
This
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phenomenon can be evidently seen in some countries
such
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as
Indonesia
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. It is reported by
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CNN
Indonesia
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that annually, Indonesian governments can burn approximately 30% to 40%
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for palm tree plantations and logging
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.
This
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,
subsequently
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, results in the degradation of food sources
as well as
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the disturbance in food webs, which later restrain the probability of wild animals to strive since there are no foods to eat as their source of energy. As revealed
further
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by
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Indonesia
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,
due to
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that activity the proportion of rare Sumatera Tiger has dwindled 10% from its previous number
due to
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their
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from hunger, as the
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of their prey has gone.
Moreover
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, it
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also
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fuelled by
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that has
occured
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in some nations. In fact, some extinct and
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species
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are being hunted down by humans
due to
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the
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their valuable net worth. Take,
for example
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, the Kasuari Bird which has
declared
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as
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an extinct
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by Indonesian governments because
the
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exaggerating
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hunts that
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been conducted by locals to possess its fur that
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1,000 million USD. Even though that detrimental situation is inevitable, there are some ways to help mitigate the given risks. Imposing a strict regulation to limit human
activities
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that can obstruct natural environments is the most effective way to tackle the problems. In
Indonesia
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, the implementation
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that method has been conducted in various ways
such
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as giving
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exclusive terms and requirements to some big companies when they want to do industrial
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in natural
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habitat
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to irresponsible people who simply break the laws. Since that
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has been imposed, there
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a report from
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governor that the
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of
orang utan
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has incrementally climbed by 10 per cent compared to the previous year. In conclusion,
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loss and
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caused by human beings can certainly make some
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extinct.
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, I think the primary solution for
this
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is to start imposing specific regulations to limit human
activities
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that potentially destroy their
habitat
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