The table and chart below. Give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The table and chart below. Give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.

 The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The table
illustrate
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the
resource
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resources
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of
police
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the police
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budget
while
the pie charts depict the distribution of
police
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the police
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budget
.
Overall
it can be seen that the total
of
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investment
to
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in
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police
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the police
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budget
experienced
a
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growth
while
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the
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national government contributed
for
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the largest amount of
money
of
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to
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police
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budget
.
Besides
, the
police
budget
spent most on salaries for officers and staff
while
the investment
to
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building and transport of
this
budget
was the least one.
To begin
with,
national
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government invested to
police
budget
175.5
million
pounds in 2017 and
this
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money
increased by 2.3
million
in 2018.
Secondly
, there was a significant rise in the contribution of local taxes
by
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above 10
million
to 102.3
million
pounds in 2018.
Lastly
, the total
of
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money
which
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invested
to
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in
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police
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budget
witnessed a remarkable increase
by
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around 15
million
to 318.6
million
pounds in 2018. Moving on
the
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other
categoris
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categories
, the amount of
money
spent on salaries held the
lion
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share over the period of time in question but it declined significantly by 6% to 69% in 2018.
Next,
technology was invested more by 6% to 14% in 2018.
Lastly
, there was a remaining unchanged in the amount of
money
distributed to building and transport at 17%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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