The table and chart below. Give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The table national government contributed
illustrate
the Change the verb form
illustrates
resource
of Fix the agreement mistake
resources
Use synonyms
police
Correct article usage
the police
budget
Use synonyms
while
the pie charts depict the distribution of Linking Words
Use synonyms
police
Correct article usage
the police
budget
.
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Overall
it can be seen that the total Linking Words
of
investment Change preposition
apply
to
Change preposition
in
Use synonyms
police
Correct article usage
the police
budget
experienced Use synonyms
a
growth Remove the article
apply
while
Linking Words
Correct article usage
the
for
the largest amount of Change preposition
apply
money
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
to
Use synonyms
police
Correct article usage
the police
budget
. Use synonyms
Besides
, the Linking Words
police
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budget
spent most on salaries for officers and staff Use synonyms
while
the investment Linking Words
to
building and transport of Change preposition
in
this
Linking Words
budget
was the least one.
Use synonyms
To begin
with, Linking Words
national
government invested to Add an article
the national
police
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budget
175.5 Use synonyms
million
pounds in 2017 and Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
invested
Wrong verb form
investment
money
increased by 2.3 Use synonyms
million
in 2018. Use synonyms
Secondly
, there was a significant rise in the contribution of local taxes Linking Words
by
above 10 Change preposition
from
million
to 102.3 Use synonyms
million
pounds in 2018. Use synonyms
Lastly
, the total Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
money
Use synonyms
which
invested Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
Change preposition
in
Use synonyms
police
Correct article usage
the police
budget
witnessed a remarkable increase Use synonyms
by
around 15 Change preposition
from
million
to 318.6 Use synonyms
million
pounds in 2018.
Moving on Use synonyms
the
other Change preposition
to the
categoris
, the amount of Correct your spelling
categories
money
spent on salaries held the Use synonyms
lion
share over the period of time in question but it declined significantly by 6% to 69% in 2018. Change noun form
lion's
Next,
technology was invested more by 6% to 14% in 2018. Linking Words
Lastly
, there was a remaining unchanged in the amount of Linking Words
money
distributed to building and transport at 17%.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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