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The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.

The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.
#information #pastimes #countries
The table compares various recreational activities across generations between 30 to 50 years old
among
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 different countries.
It is clear that
 reading was the most popular task for all nations
however
,music had the least amount of fame for people.
To begin
 with, reading by 60
unit
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 of popularity stood at the same level between Korean and Chinese.
In addition
, reading was the only task
which
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that which
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 Japanese
do
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did
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 in their spare time(62
unit
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).
American
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Americans
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 and
Canadian
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Canadians
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 had the lowest rate of reading with 15
portion
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portions
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while
 watching TV with 60
portion
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portions
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 was the
most
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apply
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favorite
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favourite
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 work
for
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apply
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them
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. Expect France and England, which had 20
unit
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 approximately for hobbies other countries showed an average rate ranging from 40 to 50
measure
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. Listening to music had the first stage between Australian(23 measure)
although
, chines with zero
percent
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 experienced the lowest place.
Also
, sport and beach remain at the same level with 30% for
Australian
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Australians
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.
Besides
, sleeping is the most chosen activity by English people.
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