The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.

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The diagram illustrates the modifications that have taken place on

the

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Paladise

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Paradise

Island

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it is clear that

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most of the facilities have changed except for a natural spring and a beach and all trees on the

island

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are pulled down.

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, new cycling paths and recreations are set up and there are a few changes in the

island

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's shape. On the left-hand side of the

island

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, a boat pier was redesigned into a cruise ship pier which had a wider footpath and two separated ways

at the end

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. The beach had received a swimming permit but the area was slightly less than the previous. The scientific research station was replaced by a hotel complex with a swimming pool located at the top of the building.

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, a new opening restaurant sprung up at the centre with a new BBQ area beside it. There was a new cafe located at the bottom of the old natural spring. A sign was put on and the umbrella was erected at the scenic lookout zone in the top right corner.

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, the cycle path was constructed and covered all the

island

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's areas.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.

Freshwater has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of this increased demand, and what measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

People in many countries are spending less time with their families. What are the reasons and effect of this?

in spite of the advances made in agriculture,many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Space exploration is too expensive and money should be spent on more important things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?