the graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 , with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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regrading
the Correct your spelling
regarding
percentage
of the population in four countries, Use synonyms
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the Phillipines
Phillipines
, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia living in urban cities from 1970 to 2020, with Correct your spelling
Philippines
prediction
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predictions
in
future for 2030 and 2040.
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for
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Overall
percentage
of Use synonyms
total
population of Malaysia and Indonesia have Add an article
the total
a total
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the
trend
. It Use synonyms
shown
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showed
steady
increase. Which Add an article
a steady
percentage
of Malaysia Use synonyms
stared
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started
around
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at around
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percent
in 1970 and Change the spelling
per cent
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a continous
continous
rise in 2020 Correct your spelling
continuous
approximately
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to approximately
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percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
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the same time, The Change preposition
At
percentage
of Indonesia in 1970 Use synonyms
around
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was around
percent
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slow
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it slowly
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soared
at
2020 around 50 Change preposition
in at
percent
.
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In contrast
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Two
countries Correct article usage
the Two
has
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have
trend
including Use synonyms
Philipines
and Thailand. It Correct article usage
the Philipines
depict
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depicts
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a fluctuate
fluctuate
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trend
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Philipinse
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Philippines
around
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was around
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percent
in 1990 and information Change the spelling
per cent
decrease
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decreased
around
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to around
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percent
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per cent
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While the
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percentage
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fluctuate
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have
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has
steady
increase.
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a steady
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percentage
of the population living in four countries has a similar Use synonyms
trend
in 2030 and 2040. Use synonyms
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trend
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have
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has
increase
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increased
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