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Many High Street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

#street #shops #business #years #development
when the
luxery
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luxury
 stories
are
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get less in a city,that may
meant
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 the total income of
this
 area is dropping.
when
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 people
winning
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earn
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 a
lot
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 money they do
care
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not care
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 how much they spend, just looking for what they want and want looks good. But once
high
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a high
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 incomer lost some money, people
getting
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got
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 worried about the
whloe
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whole
 financial system and other
enveronment
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environment
, at that time, most of
person
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the person
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 or
familly
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family
 cut their budget on spending buying nonursessies. on the other side, high street shops
decide
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deciding
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 to change
makting
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making
marketing
 plans may be the reason. Brands want to
acheive
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achieve
 another group of
clinent
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clients
client
, like super rich level, in order to have a "rare" image,they may choose to
cloose
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close
 shops in
multipel
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multiple
 areas. for
entire
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the entire
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social
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, the mind of style
are
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is
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 changing.
Newadays
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Nowadays
, people would like to the "
uniquet
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unique
"
rether
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rather
 than
simillar
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similar
 to everybody. we want more focus on the
materies
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materials
material
 and the design idea, or is it "green"? we rethinking about buying products but not just a "brand".
however
, we
stil
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still
buying
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buy
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 some products since their(high street brand) popularity.
acorrding
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According
 to
above
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the above
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, it is negative or not
depends
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depending
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 on what reason
maks
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makes
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 that
happened
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happen
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