You were absent from an important event held by the company you work for. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Apologize for your absence and explain the reasoning. Explain why you had to be at the other event. Explain what you will do to catch up.

Dear Mr. A, I am writing
this
letter to apologize
you
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, that I could not attend the inauguration
event
of the new branch opening in Pathankot, Jammu, on September 2nd. Sadly, on the date of
foundation
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foundation,
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there was another special
event
in our Punjab region to recognize the branches and the staff members who performed exceptionally well in the
last
financial year. I was co-managing the
event
with the other colleague and my presence was required here.
Additionally
, I was the
in-charge
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of the catering
arrangement
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made for the employees and their family members. I feel delighted to share that
award
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the award
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event
was a great success. I genuinely wanted to attend the inauguration as we have achieved another milestone and I am eager to meet the new
recruitees
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, for a brief introduction. I am sure you will take the branch to
the
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new heights and will make the whole team proud. Once again, congratulations
for
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the opening of new branch premises. I look forward to meeting you soon. Yours Sincerely, JK
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Task Achievement
The letter is very well-organized and addresses all parts of the task. You explained your absence, the importance of the other event, and your steps to catch up. However, adding a bit more detail about what specific actions you will take to catch up might make it more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve further, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clear and distinct separation of thoughts. Consider breaking down sentences that introduce multiple points.
Task Achievement
You have a polite and professional tone throughout the letter, which is very suitable for writing to a manager.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is logically structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, adding to the formality and professionalism of the letter.
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