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In the past when students did a university degree they tended to study in their own counrty. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays
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 the prevalence of globalisation and technological advancement,
students
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 have more chances to apply to foreign universities when they are in their homelands. In
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 essay, I would like to describe the benefits and drawbacks of
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 study. To commence with education is a valuable key to success and developing the individual personality and qualifications. It plays a valid role in forming basic knowledge, information systems and communication
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particularly in different teaching areas. The main benefit of teaching gives the
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 a great deal of opportunity and possibilities to choose the course that
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 prefer.
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: in our
country
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 (Uzbekistan) there are many universities, but
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 can’t find their specialisations, because we have a lack of faculties and directions. Meanwhile, when
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 study abroad they have a lot of opportunities to find the appropriate jobs and gain experience, skills and knowledge.
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students
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 discover the world of a foreign
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 and communicate with citizens of
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 region, make new friends and get acquainted with their culture and history. Despite these advantages, if you leave your
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, you will probably have more problems that you will have to deal with.
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, you should find an apartment and pay the rent,
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 think about food and drinks.
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, you will have to face other situations,
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, how to get medical insurance or get a study permit for foreigners in
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country
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.
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 but not least, if you stay abroad and do not return to your hometown, your
country
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 will not benefit from your knowledge. In conclusion, I believe that a person should decide for himself where to get higher education, without any pressure. Currently thanks to globalization and the development of communications, it is much easier to change jobs and lifestyles.

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Coherence Cohesion
Your essay presents a clear structure with a distinctive introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which enhances its readability and coherence. To improve, consider varying your sentence structures more and using a wider range of linking words to smoothly connect ideas.
Task Achievement
You've effectively addressed the task by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, providing relevant examples to support your points. For further improvement, aim to develop your main points further with more detailed examples and consider exploring the impact of these advantages and disadvantages more deeply.
Introduction Conclusion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively framed your essay.
Examples
You successfully used examples to relate to the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, which grounded your argument in real-world contexts.
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