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Some people think studying in groups is better, while some think self-studying is better for school students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Everyone knows that education is necessary to live a better and sensible life. So every society
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differernt matothods
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different methods
 of studying. But there is
also
 a difference of opinion about studying alone or studying in groups. Most people think that
group
study
 is better because
while
 studying in groups you have the opportunity to share your knowledge with
group
 members and gain some useful knowledge and educational techniques.
Furthermore
,
student
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a student
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 who
are
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 studying with their classmates get less burden of their exams and
study
 in
stressless
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 atmosphere.
On the other hand
, If we talk about self-studying, many students thoughts they are comfortable if they are studying alone. In favour of self-
study
, they argue that
study
 needs full concentration to understand the concepts and needs a peaceful atmosphere in which they can focus on their targets.
Moreover
, they think that a self-studying student could be able to get help from different sources like
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 at his convenience. As for my concern, I stand with the self-studying because when you are studying alone you can properly manage your time and have a lot of options to change your schedule with your ease. There are many students who
study
 alone in their academic period and always get high grades.
Furthermore
, a student spends almost six hours in the school and learns different things with their class fellows. After
school
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 he needs to focus on the topic that he learnt in school, so I think, it is a good idea if he studies at home alone with his book to focus his mind rather than going outside in the name of
group
 studying.
lastly
, I conclude the essay with my finding that self-
study
 is better than
group
study
 in all aspects.
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Task Achievement
Try to balance the discussion of both views before stating your opinion. It enhances the overall persuasiveness of your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Incorporate a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow and coherence between ideas.
Task Achievement
Including more specific examples and evidence could strengthen your argument and provide a more compelling case for your opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion
You presented a well-structured essay with a clear introduction, balanced discussion, and a conclusive opinion.
Task Achievement
Good job on clearly stating your opinion and providing a rationale for your preference.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative learning
  • peer interaction
  • cognitive stimulation
  • academic discussion
  • time management
  • personalized learning
  • self-motivation
  • critical thinking
  • resourceful
  • autonomous
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