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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett, In your letter suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs. Barrett, I am writing with regard to your advertisement for a coordinator in your house for the next summer. I hope
this
 letter finds you healthy and wealthy. I want to demonstrate my interest in helping you
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 your daily housekeeping. I will be able to help you with not only tidying up your house but
also
 shopping for your essentials from stores. Let me explain my desire in more detail. I was always passionate about travelling to Canada,
Hence
, working for you would help me to earn some money and make my wishes come true.
Besides
, I can satisfy my sense of purpose by helping others. I should tell you I will manage to help you on the weekdays from morning to afternoon,
while
 I prefer to keep my weekends for family and friends. I hope I receive your prompt response, and please do not hesitate to ask if you need any clarification. Yours faithfully Ali A
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task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the task. While you did suggest how you could help and why you would like to do the work, your explanation of when you will be available could be expanded upon with more precise time frames.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone throughout the letter. Phrases like 'healthy and wealthy' are informal and not usually appropriate in this context.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter can be improved by organizing information into clear paragraphs, each containing a single idea. Make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
coherence cohesion
A conclusion sentence could enhance the closure of the letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Domestic chores
  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
  • Time management
  • Prior commitments
  • Punctuality
  • Reliability
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