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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made

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The diagram illustrates the production process of Ketchup. The tomato sauce production process involves several essential steps to maintain product quality and safety. From harvesting to distribution, each stage is carefully executed to ensure the integrity of the final product.
Initially
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, ripe tomatoes are harvested and sorted to ensure quality.
Subsequently
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, they are transported to the ketchup factory where they undergo preparation, including the removal of stalks, seeds, and skin. After preparation, the tomatoes are crushed and seasoned, followed by a resting period of two hours. The seasoned mixture is
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, and subjected to rigorous quality control measures. Once approved, the bottled sauce is packaged for distribution to supermarkets and retail stores.
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structure
The essay effectively describes the tomato ketchup production process, but including an introduction that clearly states the overview of the process and a conclusion summarizing the main points would enhance its structure.
detail
To further improve, consider providing more specific examples or details about each step in the process. For instance, mention the types of quality control measures or specific seasoning ingredients.
logical structure
The logical flow from harvesting to distribution was well presented, showing a good understanding of the process.
task achievement
The overall task was completed with a clear explanation of the main steps involved in the production process.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production process
  • raw material
  • final product
  • selection
  • preparation
  • washing
  • sorting
  • peeling
  • deseeding
  • quality control
  • cooking
  • concentration
  • thickening
  • seasoning
  • additional ingredients
  • spices
  • sugar
  • vinegar
  • flavor concentration
  • bottling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • safety standards
  • taste test
  • labeling
  • integrity checks
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