The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making Sugar from sugarcane.

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The given process chart illustrates how

sugar

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is produced from

sugar

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cane.

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total

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a total

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seven

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of seven

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steps are involved in performing the task and some work is done by people and some by machines

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with, it is clearly seen from the given chart that to produce

sugar

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firstly

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sugar

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canes are grown which

take

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takes

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about 12-18 months to grow.

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harvesting

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the harvesting

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sugar

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canes

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cane

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is performed by two methods . First is to use vehicles or Machines

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as tractors and second is to cultivate by humans using hands. Afterwards, the cultivated

sugar

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canes are crushed by using

crushing

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a crushing

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machine to make

juice

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then

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the

juice

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passes through a

funnel shaped

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funnel-shaped

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object which has

limestone

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a limestone

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filter for purifying

juice

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Then

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this

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crystal clear

juice

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is heated in a large evaporator and by the process of

evaporation

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evaporation,

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juice

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converts into syrup.

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the centrifugetion

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centrifugetion

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centrifugation

process

take

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takes

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place in order to separate the

sugar

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crystals from

syrup

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the syrup

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. .

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...

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Lastly

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this

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syrup is dried and cooled in a big container to

finally

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produce

sugar

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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11
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

172 words

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making Sugar from sugarcane.

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Give contact details for when you are away. Give instructions about how to care for your pet. Describe other household duties.

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