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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The given chart demonstrates the
amount
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number
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 of
people
, who travelled to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 during the
years
 shown.
Overall
, it can be observed,
this
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that this
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 place has become more popular in 7
years
.
Number
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The number
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 of
visitors
in
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on
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 cruise ships increased dramatically,
whereas
 the
number
 of
people
 staying on
island
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the island
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 went up gradually.
According to
 the given data, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
 staying on cruise ships fluctuated from 2010 to 2013, showing 0.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
 and there
is
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was
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 an upward trend in the next 4
years
 with the highest
number
 of
visitors
 in 2 million
people
 in 2017. The
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 started to rise slowly
from
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in
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 2011 and reached
the
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a
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 peak in 2013 with 1.5 million
people
, which was stable until 2015. The total
number
 of
visitors
 in the first
years
 was 1 million p
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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