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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The given chart demonstrates the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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, who travelled to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 during the
years
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 shown.
Overall
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, it can be observed,
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this
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that this
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 place has become more popular in 7
years
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.
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Number
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The number
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 of
visitors
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in
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on
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 cruise ships increased dramatically,
whereas
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 went up gradually.
According to
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 the given data, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 staying on cruise ships fluctuated from 2010 to 2013, showing 0.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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 and there
is
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was
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 an upward trend in the next 4
years
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 with the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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 in 2 million
people
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 in 2017. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 started to rise slowly
from
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in
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 2011 and reached
the
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a
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 peak in 2013 with 1.5 million
people
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, which was stable until 2015. The total
number
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 of
visitors
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 in the first
years
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 was 1 million p
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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