Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir/Madam, First of

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thank you to your

newpaper

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newspaper

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generous award which you have been giving to the most

helpfull

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helpful

community. I would like you

suggest

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a name which is

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ideal candidate for

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award

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Mr. Rohit Sir who is a teacher in our local community school. He helped young children who cannot

persue

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education by lack of funds or any other unseen reasons. He runs a small primary school in

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community park near the agricultural building. His goal is to educate poor and helpless families children so that they can dream about a secure future. In my

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he will be best suited for

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award for

local

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comminity

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community

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always ready to help his students in any situation. Your's

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, Rishab Sharma.

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detail

Try to delve a bit deeper into the specific activities and contributions of Mr. Rohit Sir to provide a stronger case for why he deserves the award.

example

Consider mentioning a specific anecdote or example that highlights Mr. Rohit Sir's impact on the community.

accuracy

Review the letter for minor spelling or grammatical errors to enhance clarity and professional presentation. For instance, 'helpfull' should be 'helpful', and 'persue' should be 'pursue'.

structure

You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your letter.

tone

The letter maintains a respectful and appropriate tone throughout, suitable for its intended audience.

idea flow

You effectively presented a singular main idea in each paragraph, which aids in the reader's understanding.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

134 words

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