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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table provides information about the sources of police funding,
whereas
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 the pie charts illustrate to which sectors
money
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 was allocated in 2017 and 2018 in a particular area of Britain.
Overall
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, most of the investments came from the local government and a large amount of
money
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 was spent on officers’ and staff’s revenues in both years.
According to
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 the table, the
overall
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 number of
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funding constituted over 300 million pounds in both 2017 and 2018.
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 over
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half of the total
money
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 was allocated from the national government, the local taxes were significantly lower than that of certain authorities, comprising only a third of the total
fundings
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 in the given years. Meanwhile, other resources
such
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 as grants remained almost unchanged
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 the figure
accounted
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 for 38 million. Regarding the pie charts, it is obviously seen that the employees’ salaries dominated the spending
money
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 with around 70%. In terms of buildings and transport expenditures, the figure maintained the same level at 17%;
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, technological expenses experienced a slight increase from 8% to 14% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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