The chart shows the percentage of people in one country who visited the gym, by age group and the frequency of their visits, in 2021

The chart shows the percentage of people in one country who visited the gym, by age group and the frequency of their visits, in 2021
The bar graph gives information about how frequently individuals in three different
age
groups living in one country went to the
fitness
centre
in 2021.
Overall
,
it is clear that
a majority of people said that they never exercised at a
fitness
centre
, regardless of their
age
.
Also
, the proportion of those who visited the gym was higher in the youngest
age
group than in the two other generation groups. Looking at the details, nearly seven out of every ten adults in their 30s did not pay a visit to a sports
centre
at all 65 per
cent
, which was the highest figure.
On the other hand
, the lowest percentage of individuals who never entered the gym was the youngest people, those in their 20s, at around 57 per
cent
.
In addition
, slightly over 60% of those aged 40 to 49 never visited the
fitness
centre
.
In contrast
, one-seventh of the people in the 20-to-29 generation cohort did some exercise at the
fitness
centre
several times a week or rarely 15 per
cent
.
This
was about 5 per
cent
higher than the proportions of those in other
age
ranges who worked out at the
fitness
centre
as often as adults in their twenties.
Finally
, when we look at the remaining two frequency ranges, exactly the same proportion of individuals of all generation groups trained at
fitness
clubs a few times.
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