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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
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The table gives information about the United Kingdom unemployed spent their
last
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 year. which the figure shows in a percentage.
Overall
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, the Data in the table gives the same information for
men
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 and
women
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. Meanwhile, The top three activities that were the most common
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were
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 Housework, Shopping, and Job Hunting. But, The proportion of
women
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 over than
men
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 in two time, morning and afternoon. which Housework was the most common activity for
women
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 but not for
men
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.
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, More
women
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 than
men
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 went shopping in the morning and afternoon.
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, activities about gardening, TV, and Drinking are more popular with
men
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 than
women
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 in two times.
However
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, leisure drinking is not very popular in unemployment in the UK. Which it can not provide productive. The
last
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 activities are staying in bed and playing sports not productive in
women
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's groups in the afternoon. It makes feel bored to them and not interested.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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