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The graph gives information about four different sports players

The graph gives information about four different sports players
The line graph gives information about the number of Basketball ,
Tennis
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, Badminton,
Rugby
Correct word choice
and Rugby
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 participants over five
year
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Overall
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 ,the four sports experienced different trends in the time period
While
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,
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apply
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 the sport participants Rugby plan to
sharp
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sharpen
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over given the period .
Moreover
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Tennis
Correct article usage
the Tennis
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 slide
increas
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increases
 between five
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year
Change to a plural noun
years
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. As the graph shows , rugby players started at 150 people in 1985 followed by a small rise to around 175 people in 1990 . By the
end
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 of
figure
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the figure
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 sharply
climb
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climbed
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just
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to just
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 over 270 in 2005. Regarding
Tennis
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 players started over 280
peoples
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people
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 in 1985 ,but a few
yers
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years
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 ago it declined
210
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to 210
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 in
1990
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the 1990
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year
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,
afterward
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afterwards
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gradual
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a gradual
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 fall.
At the
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end
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 of
line
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the line
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 pointer
tennis
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 players 50 in the 2005
year
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 As for
basketball
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basketball,
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 it began at 80 in 1985 . After a few
years
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 turning to
end
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 the line graph did not level off
at
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apply
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.Regarding badminton first time 55 in 985. Again it
small go
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went
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 down in 1990
moreover
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 5
years
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 ago it a bit increas. Did not change in the remaining 3
years
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.
At the
Linking Words
end
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 of the
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Fix the agreement mistake
year
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years
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years,
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 the number of people in basketball and badminton had the same percentages

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tennis, year, end, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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