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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar
chart
indicate
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 the
exports
 of
pinable
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pinnable
 all over the world in the most producing countries (
country
 A,
country
 B and
country
 c) for two years in 2009 and 2019. The other pie
chart
 illustrates the percentage of
decreasing
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 in the cost to each
pineaple
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pineapple
 user in 2019.
Overall
,
country
 A shows the highest number of
pinapple
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pineapple
exports
 in 2019
while
country
 c is considered the lowest
country
duing
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during
 the same year . A
galnce
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glance
 look at the bar
chart
 regarding the
pinapple
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pineapple
exports
 in 2009 and 2019.
It is clear that
Country
 A achieved the apeak in
the
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exports
 in 2019 above 10
millions
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million
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 metric
tonnnes
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tonnes
.
On the other hand
,
country
 c recorded the least amount
osf
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of
exports
 in the same year which is lower than 1 million metric
tonnnes
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tonnes
.
In contrast
 with the
exports
 in 2009 ,
country
 B
is
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the
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achieved the
greast
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greatest
great
 amount of
exports
 above 4 million metric
tonnnes
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tonnes
. Regarding the other pie
chart
, the amount of distribution and retail are
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the represented
represented
there presented
 above
third
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a third
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 of the
breakdon
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breakdown
 of the
costbto
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cost to
 the user which is 35%
while
 taxes is the lowest percentage 4% only .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, exports, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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