the chart below gives information about the amount of time children spend with their parents.
The above bar charts
represents
the data of total Change the verb form
represent
time
spend
by Wrong verb form
spent
children
with their parents. The illustartions
suggest the given information is divided Correct your spelling
illustrations
illustration
in to
three categories with Join the words
into
time
in hours mentioned on y-axis
.
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the y-axis
Overall
, the graphs show an entirely different trends
when coming to weekdays and Correct the article-noun agreement
entirely different trends
an entirely different trend
weekends
. During weekdays, the together
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apply
time
of parents with their kids
is much lesser
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less
whereas
on weekends
its
higher. On Replace the word
it's
it is
an
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average
the mother spends almost 2 to 7 hours every day with their Add a comma
average,
children
irrespective of what day it is. However
, father
looked like the least Correct article usage
the father
interacted
person with the kid.
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interactive
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dad,
dad
the Capitalize word
Dad
kids
showed an
very little leisure Correct article usage
apply
time
. On the other
hand
mom seems more close Add a comma
hand,
with
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to
children
. Correct article usage
the children
In addition
to that on weekends
, during
4 pm to 5 Change preposition
from
pm
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pm,
kids
are more active.
Moreover
mom looks Add a comma
Moreover,
an
inevitable person in Change preposition
like an
children
's life especially
during weekdays. Add the comma(s)
, especially
In contrast
, both mom and dad seem to be much closer to kids
during weekends
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, children, weekends, kids with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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