The diagram below shows the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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A glance at the two maps provides a previous

school

site in 2004 and the plan for its changes after two decades in 2014.

Overall

, the student number witnessed a growth from 600 people to 1000 people between 2004 and 2024.

Therefore

, the campus area is planned to be expanded.

According to

the information shown on the maps,there will be an extra

car

park

area which is going to be located at the site of the sports field

while

the sports field is planned to be moved to the south side of the

car

park

2 and its space will be much smaller than its original one.

Besides

the

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school

building 1 will be connected with

school

building 2 and the path will be shortened and connects

the

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school

building 1 and

the

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additional

school

building 3 which will be next to

the

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car

park

2. What should be particularly mentioned is that there is a new road between the main entrance and the

car

park

2 and the main entrance will be at the same site.

To sum up

, it can be apparently seen that the plan is designed for the soaring number of pupils.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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195 words

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