The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram highlights the process by which
aluminum
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cans
are recycled.
Overall
, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with the special collection of
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and finishing with the sales of
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cans
to
public
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. First of all, used
cans
need to be thrown in special bins and taken to collection
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.
Then
they are collected and transported to a factory where
cans
are first sorted and
then
cleaned. In the subsequent stage, the
cans
are shredded and crushed in a special machine. The metal is
then
heated to a high temperature to allow the
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to melt.
Following
this
, it is rolled out flat to a thickness of between 2.5mm and 6 mm, (depending on what it is going to be used for). The
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is now ready to be recycled into new
packaging
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,
such
as drink containers.
Finally
, the new
cans
are delivered to
soft
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drink factory where they are filled. The
cans
can now be sold to the public and reused. In the UK, 74 per cent of all
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cans
that are sold are recycled. (165 words)
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