The diagram below shows the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004.

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The map illustrates the modification that has taken place in the site of the school between the year 2004 and the projection of 2024.

Overall

it is clear that

the number of students will increase in the next 20 years and both old buildings remain the same.

However

, new facilities will be set up

while

a sports field is relocated.

Firstly

, school building number three will be constructed on the old sports field with a new parking lot on the right-hand side. The play area will be resized and moved to the south of the new parking.

In addition

, trees will be planted in the east along two new facilities. Both old schools will be redesigned and connected to each other. The old path will only tether the new academy and the new connection, the other part will be removed.

Additionally

, the new connection route between the entrance and car park 2 will spring up and it will pass both school 2 and the new sports area.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Linking words
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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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