The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The charts illustrate how much a UK school spent on different running costs over a 20-year period.
Overall
, teachers’
salaries
constituted the largest
cost
to the school, and
while
spending increased dramatically for equipment and insurance, there were corresponding drops in
expenditure
on things
such
as books and on other workers’
salaries
. In all three years, the greatest
expenditure
was on staff
salaries
. But
while
other workers’
salaries
saw a fall from 28% in 1981 to only 15% of spending in 2001, teachers’ pay remained the biggest
cost
, reaching 50% of total spending in 1991 and ending at 45% in 2001.
Expenditure
on resources
such
as books had increased to 20% by 1991 before decreasing to only 9% by the end of the period.
In contrast
, the
cost
of furniture and equipment saw an opposite trend.
This
cost
decreased to only 5% of total
expenditure
in 1991 but rose dramatically in 2001 when it represented 23% of the school budget.
Similarly
Add a comma
Similarly,
show examples
the
cost
of insurance experienced a rising trend, growing from only 2% to 8% by 2001 (or: there was a rise in the
cost
of insurance).
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  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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