The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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The charts illustrate how much a UK school spent on different running costs over a 20-year period.
Overall
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, teachers’
salaries
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constituted the largest
cost
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to the school, and
while
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spending increased dramatically for equipment and insurance, there were corresponding drops in
expenditure
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on things
such
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as books and on other workers’
salaries
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. In all three years, the greatest
expenditure
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was on staff
salaries
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. But
while
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other workers’
salaries
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saw a fall from 28% in 1981 to only 15% of spending in 2001, teachers’ pay remained the biggest
cost
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, reaching 50% of total spending in 1991 and ending at 45% in 2001.
Expenditure
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on resources
such
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as books had increased to 20% by 1991 before decreasing to only 9% by the end of the period.
In contrast
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, the
cost
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of furniture and equipment saw an opposite trend.
This
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cost
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decreased to only 5% of total
expenditure
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in 1991 but rose dramatically in 2001 when it represented 23% of the school budget.
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Similarly
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Similarly,
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the
cost
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of insurance experienced a rising trend, growing from only 2% to 8% by 2001 (or: there was a rise in the
cost
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of insurance).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, cost, expenditure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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