THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012
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The graph illustrates the
crime
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rate changes that occurred in Newport city reported from 2003-2012 in three types of crimes. It is immediately noticeable that the burglary rates had significantly dropped over time
in contrast
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to the car being stolen,
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robbery rates remained stable throughout the period. Burglary was the most common theft found in Newport with almost 3500
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reported in 2003, it continued to escalate and hit its peak in 2004 with nearly 4000 reports. Since
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, the
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had
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decreased gradually and hit its rock bottom in 2008 with about 1000 thefts.
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the first type of
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had diminished, carjacking in 2008 with over 2000 thefts
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became the most recurrent
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. It started at 3000
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;
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, moderately increased over the period,
eventually
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and eventually
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ended the 2012 reports with just over 2500
cases
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. Robbery,
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, had the least
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in
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city with just over 500
cases
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since 2003 which is the comparable amount in 2012.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, cases with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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