THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE CHANGES THAT TOOK PLACE IN THREE DIFFERENT AREAS OF CRIME IN NEWPORT CITY CENTER FROM 2003 – 2012
The graph illustrates the
crime
rate changes that occurred in Newport city reported from 2003-2012 in three types of crimes. It is immediately noticeable that the burglary rates had significantly dropped over time
in contrast
to the car being stolen,
while
robbery rates remained stable throughout the period. Burglary was the most common theft found in Newport with almost 3500
cases
reported in 2003, it continued to escalate and hit its peak in 2004 with nearly 4000 reports. Since
then
, the
crime
had
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has
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decreased gradually and hit its rock bottom in 2008 with about 1000 thefts.
While
the first type of
crime
had diminished, carjacking in 2008 with over 2000 thefts
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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became the most recurrent
crime
. It started at 3000
cases
;
then
, moderately increased over the period,
eventually
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and eventually
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ended the 2012 reports with just over 2500
cases
. Robbery,
however
, had the least
cases
in
this
city with just over 500
cases
since 2003 which is the comparable amount in 2012.
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