The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The charts illustrate the amount of purchasing from online shops in New Zealand in a decade, from 2003 to 2013.

Overall

, it can be seen that the taste of New Zealand's individuals has changed and they tend to spend more money on indoor activities, buying books, or spending time for movies,

instead

of outdoor ones. In 2003, more than half of people tended to purchase from the travel and clothes sectors, 36% and 24% respectively in comparison to other parts.

However

, the travel sailing rate was faced with a minor decrease, about 7%, in 2013

while

, the clothes sector experienced a decline of about one-eighth which was the biggest reduction in 2013.

On the other hand

, the film/music industry has earned huge popularity among the people of New Zealand. The rate of buying from

this

industry had grown from 21% in 2003 to 33% in 2013 which was the sharpest increase in comparison to other sectors.

Furthermore

, the purchasing rate from the books part only went up by 3%.

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The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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