The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how
instant
noodles
are produced in a manufacturing plant.
Overall
, the production of instant
noodles
is a linear man-made process including eight distinct stages, beginning with the mixing of raw materials and culminating in the labelling and sealing of new instant
noodles
.
First off, flour is stored in the storage silos that are transported by a truck. Then
, there it is combined with water and oil in a mixer to create dough
. This
dough
is allowed to pass through several rollers which knead it until it becomes dough
sheets that are necessary for the next stages. After that, these sheets are cut into strips by slitters.
The dough
strips are then
transformed into noodles
discs for the cooking process, here it is cooked with oil. Once cooked, it is dried properly and put into the cups with vegetables as well as
spices before labelling and sealing these cups. Finally
, these new cups of instant
noodles
are ready for distribution.Submitted by mohammad39 on
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