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the table show the average length of video advertisements on the internet and average length of time viewers spend watching them summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisions where revelant.

the table show the average length of video advertisements on the internet and average length of time viewers spend watching them summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisions where revelant.
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The given table illustrates the average length of video advertisements on the Internet and how many
seconds
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 of these full
adverts
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people
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 watch.
Overall
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,
adverts
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 for public
service
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 show the highest length, and the least is clothing.
People
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more
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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prefer to watch the advertisement for public
service
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, and the least preferable is other retail. In general, among all kinds of advertisements and their length
people
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 watch only half of
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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.
According to
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 the table,
adverts
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 for public
service
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 have the highest time accounting for 45.8
seconds
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, followed by automotive and entertainment with 27.2 and 27.8, respectively. Financial
service
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 and other retail show the figures around 20
seconds
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. There are only five types that show
adverts
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less
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in less
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 than 20
seconds
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, where clothing is the least with 14.6
seconds
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. The highest attention of
people
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 on public
service
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adverts
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 with 18.5
seconds
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, followed by automotive and financial services with 14.7 and 16.3
seconds
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, respectively. In the middle of the interest of
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people
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people,
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 there are
adverts
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 for travel, entertainment and home furnishings with approximately 13 to 10
seconds
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 of watching time. There are four types of
adverts
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 that viewers don't look too long which are consumer electronics with 7.1, pharmaceuticals with 6.3, clothing with 6.0 and other retail with only 4.5
seconds
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seconds, adverts, people, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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