The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of internet shopping retailers between 2003 and 2013 comprising travel, entertainment, books and clothes in New Zealand.

Overall

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it is clear that

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the trend changes throughout the period.

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, movies, songs and travel still remain the main source of online selling in New Zealand.

To begin

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with, Travelling occupied the highest percentage, which was more than one-third in that year. Fabrics represented well under one-fourth

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film and music sales were almost the same number as in books, which was 21% and 19% respectively.

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, after a decade, film and music, which were in third place ten years ago, surpassed travelling and clothes

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becoming the first in 2013, which was about 33%. Travel sectors dropped from 2003 by 7% nearly the same as clothes which decreased by 8%.

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, books for the retail sector, from 19% in 2003, was increased to 22% in 2013.

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The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

Holding international games such as Olympic games is an exciting event. Some people think that it has positive effects while others argue it is a waste of money. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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