The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of internet shopping retailers between 2003 and 2013 comprising travel, entertainment, books and clothes in New Zealand.

Overall

it is clear that

the trend changes throughout the period.

However

, movies, songs and travel still remain the main source of online selling in New Zealand.

To begin

with, Travelling occupied the highest percentage, which was more than one-third in that year. Fabrics represented well under one-fourth

while

film and music sales were almost the same number as in books, which was 21% and 19% respectively.

Furthermore

, after a decade, film and music, which were in third place ten years ago, surpassed travelling and clothes

as well as

becoming the first in 2013, which was about 33%. Travel sectors dropped from 2003 by 7% nearly the same as clothes which decreased by 8%.

Additionally

, books for the retail sector, from 19% in 2003, was increased to 22% in 2013.

Submitted by nnatthinee on Sun Apr 21 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

153 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
People are encouraged to get rid of things in order to get newest fashion and the latest Technology.Do the disadvantage of this trend outweigh its advantage.
These days, things could impact our personality in every aspect of our lives. So some people think that throwing the old things, even sometimes the newest stuff, is a good thing to be updated with the latest fashion. This essay will discuss both sides and draw my personal conclusion.
4.5
band
Some people thinks computer games have negative impacts on children.To what extent do you agreee or disagree ?
Nowadays mobile phones and computers are part of our life. Because our work is not done without mobile phones and computers. There are good and bad sides. We can see all the places in the world, we can play the games we want, we can listen to music which we want, we can do our homework online, we can talk face to face over the phone and we can do a lot works with mobile phones and computers. There are many types of mobile phones and computers. Of them "iPhone", "Samsung", "LG", "Acer" and others. There are 2 types of computers. Of them "Computer" and "Laptop". They are working with the "Windows" system. Computers and mobile phones are useful.
6.5
band
In some countries, small town-centre shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?
In some nations, people are more like to drive a car to shop in the supermarkets on the outskirts. While this trend could cause an increasing use of automobiles, I personally believe that its benefits outweigh its drawbacks.
<4
band
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Today, in the world nothing is impossiple. sometimes the thinking of cultures are different from other cultures. Some people can rely on children to acomplish everything while others can not. In this essy, I will mention the advantages and disadantages about making children achive everything.
5.5
band
Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that children should be taught by their parents about how to function as useful members of society, while others believe that sending children to educational institutions is the best way for them to study this. Although the latter opinion can be beneficial in some cases, I believe that family upbringing plays a more important role in educating children to be good parts of the community.

The pie chart charts below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

People are encouraged to get rid of things in order to get newest fashion and the latest Technology.Do the disadvantage of this trend outweigh its advantage.

Some people thinks computer games have negative impacts on children.To what extent do you agreee or disagree ?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.