Discuss advantages and disadvantages of watching horror movies.

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Nowadays,
vast
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number of
people
prefer watching
horror
movies
. It can maintain some obvious harmful consequences for society.
While
there are some advantages to
this
phenomenon,I consider that they are not as much as their disadvantages. On the one hand,
horror
movies
can cause some health problems
especially
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for children. It can lead
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some mental and heart issues. Most
of
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horror
movies
might have some moments which are some
horror
things suddenly
be appeared
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. Cause of
this
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moments, a lot of
people
passed away
by
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having heart
attack
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attacks
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.
For example
, during the film,
watcher
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watchers
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can come face to face with a frightening face when they don't expect it .
Also
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that moment can not go out in their mind their entire
lifes
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lives
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.
As a result
,
wathcing
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watching
horror
movies
can affect
people
's health
problem
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problems
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.
On the other hand
, scary films may have some advantages for
community
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the community
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. They can be ready for
reality
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the reality
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of the world. They should know that there is not just only fun in the world. Our
life
has blood, fear or
horror
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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.
For example
,
people
who watch a
horror
movie might understand the reality of the world and can think more realistic after
from
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that time.
As a result
, scary
movies
may help
community
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the community
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to understand
the
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life
more
true
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and act
thier
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their
life
more aware.
As a result
,
horror
films have some advantages and disadvantages. It can influence
people
's mental and
hearth
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heart
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health. Meanwhile, it could inspire them to behave more realistic and more aware in their
life
.
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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