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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.
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The line graph gives information about how regional
household
 recycling
rates
 namely
France
 United Kingdom and
Germany
 between 2005 and 2015 .
Overall
 the
proportion
 of
household
rates
 showed
Correct article usage
the
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Correct your spelling
UK
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Uk
 and
Germany
 similar rising trends
whereas
 that of
France
 saw small with
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom having the biggest.
According to
 the line graph that showed
Correct your spelling
UK
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Uk
 average rising 35
proportion
 of
rates
 in 2005 .
France
 sharp rising 50
percentage
 of
rates
 in 2005 .
Germany
fall
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fell
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20
proportion
 of
rates
 in 2005 .
Uk
Correct your spelling
UK
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minimal rising 41
percent
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per cent
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 of
household
rates
 in 2007 .
France
 a little bit drop 47
proportion
 of
household
rates
 in 2007.
Germany
 significantly
rising
Wrong verb form
rose
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 30
percentage
 of
household
rates
 in 2007.
United
Correct article usage
The United
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 Kingdom didn't change 40
proportion
 of
household
rates
 in 2009 .
France
dramatic drop
Replace the word
dramatically dropped
show examples
 30
proportion
 of
rates
 in 2009.
Germany
 a little bit rising 40
percentage
 of
household
rates
 in 2009.
Uk
 significantly
rising
Wrong verb form
rose
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 55
percentage
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per cent
show examples
 of
rates
 in 2011 .
France
drop
Wrong verb form
dropped
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 30
proportion
 of
household
rates
 in 2011.
Germany
 minimal rising 50
percentage
 of
rates
 in 2011.
Uk
 a little bit rising
58
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with 58
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 percent of
household
rates
 in 2013.
France
 dramatic 30
proportion
 of
rates
 in 2013 .
Germany
Change noun form
Germany's
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 average
rising
Wrong verb form
rose
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55 percent of
household
rates
 in 2013.
Uk
Correct your spelling
UK
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minimal rising 61
proportion
 of
household
rates
 in 2015 .
France
steady
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steadily
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rising
Verb problem
raised
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40
proportion
 of
rates
 in 2015.
Germany
Change noun form
Germany's
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dramatic
Change the word
dramatically
show examples
 rising 68
proportion
 of
household
rates
 in 2015
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, rates, france, germany, proportion, uk, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household recycling rates
  • regional
  • line graph
  • countries
  • between
  • overall trends
  • changes
  • compare
  • ten-year period
  • differences
  • reasons
  • summarize
  • comment
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