In many countries, students take a year gap after finishing school and work or travel during this period. Should students take a gap year before attending universities? What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

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Consider using clearer transition phrases to improve the flow of your essay, such as 'Moreover', 'Additionally', or 'On the contrary'.
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To enhance your task achievement, aim to explore each advantage and disadvantage more deeply, providing more detailed examples and elaborating on their impact.
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Watch out for small spelling and grammar mistakes, as they can distract from your otherwise strong arguments. Regular practice and proofreading can help minimize these errors.
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Consider balancing the advantages and disadvantages more equally to provide a more comprehensive analysis of the topic.
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Your concluding paragraph succinctly summarizes your arguments, effectively reinforcing your viewpoint.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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