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The table below shows how the UKunemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.

The table below shows how the UKunemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.
The table illustrates how the British people who did not have a job spent their
time
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 on 14 different activities categorized by gender and different parts of the day the previous year.
Overall
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, it is apparent that the males allotted the largest proportion of their
time
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 to job hunting
while
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 the females mainly
dealing
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dealt
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 with house chores. Looking into detail, in
mornings
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the mornings
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 , both genders were not spending too much
time
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 on activities like drinking, playing
sport
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sports
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,
watching
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or watching
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 TV( less than 5%).Almost half of the women's whole
time
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 was spent doing housework and these figures are almost three times higher than men's .
The another
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 significant disparity could be observed in gardening.
Last
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 year
the
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apply
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British men and women allocated 14% And 2% of their
time
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 to gardening, respectively During afternoons, most of the patterns did not undergo dramatic changes with the exception of housework. They both still
alloted
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allowed
the
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a
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 substantial amount of
time
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 to job hunting (13% approximately)
İnterestingly
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Interestingly
, the females did not spend any
time
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 staying
on
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in
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bed
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the bed
a bed
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 or playing a sport
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 men did those activities for a tiny
time
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 frame.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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