Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some of the population believe the developed form of conversation has changed their interaction and they are facing negative consequences in their relationship. I generally agree with the negative aspects of the new form of technology,meanwhile, there are several advantages of technology that I will mention.
the same other groups of community they lose their connection with their surroundings.
In conclusion, in my opinion, any advancement in science has both positive and negative aspects and we have to compare their outcome to figure out its value. I believe, the new form of communication has brought several benefits,
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with, the developments in modern life have changed our connection habits and citizens altered their routine interactions and have replaced them with phones. The mobile phone has made our lives more convenient and Linking Words
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, previous generations get used to letters and telegraphs and that equipment was slow and inaccurate and Linking Words
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cutting-edge technology increased our living standards. Linking Words
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, we can be informed by others without travelling or moving and Linking Words
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will help the environment because the population will not use their cars, Linking Words
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task consumed their time and was challenging but now just by a call ,all will be handled.
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new method of communication has brought several drawbacks, Linking Words
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as depression in a group of crowd and the isolation of the elderly. Because of the media, some groups of people cannot adapt completely to Linking Words
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, we have to consider some of the citizens that cannot get used to Linking Words
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