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Now a days people are admiring media and sports stars even though they don’t set a good example. Do you think it is positive or negative development.

#people #media #sports #stars #don’t #development
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Nowdays
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,media and
celebreties
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celebrities
playing
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play
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 a vital role
to
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in
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 creating a brand positioning in the mind of
people
,
However
 sometimes they
shown
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show
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somthing
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something
that is
 very cringe for
public
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the public
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. I agree with the statement that there is a lot of negative
impact
 of
such
 advertising by television or
well known
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pwrson
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person
.
To begin
 with, in
current
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the current
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mordern
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modern
 era
people
 are so
much
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dependent on whatever
thay
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they
have seen
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see
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on
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in
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 on television.
This
 thing
creat
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creates
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 a strong
impact
 on their daily routine life.
Beside
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this
such
thing
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things
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 create
and
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an
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 adverse
impact
 on their personal life as well.
For Example
, those celebrities who are doing promotions for
alcohole
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alcohol
 and beer
is
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are
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 not justified. Because
this
 is extremely
harmfull
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harmful
 for
body
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the body
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,
Apart from
this
its
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it's
it is
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 so expensive to afford that
people
 spend a lot of money on that.
however
, there are few genuine
product
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products
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that
is
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are
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 promoted by celebrities and media
that
is
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are
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 very healthy,
such
 as
a
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apply
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nutrion
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nutrition
 food and bars.
such
product
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products
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creating
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create
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 health
concious
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conscious
 among the
people
 which
is
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has
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positive
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the positive
a positive
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impact
of
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on
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this
 side.
Although
, negative
impact
are
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is
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 over to the positive
iimpact
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impact
.
for example
, children who are watching television have
strong
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a strong
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impact
if
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on
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 whatever they are watching in their mindset. if
tehy
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they
 watch
adds
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ads
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of
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for
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weeds
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weed
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 promotion they feel like there is nothing worse
to take
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than taking
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 weed.
This
create
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creates
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an
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a
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 negative
impact
 on them.
To conclude
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apply
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this
, negative
impact
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impacts
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 are more compared to
postive
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positive
, i
believed
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believe
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people
shuld
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should
 not
admired
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admire
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 celebrities blindly. as
this
scanario
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scenario
 contain more adverse
impact
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impacts
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then
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than
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those good one
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that good one
those good ones
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role model
  • admiration
  • influence
  • celebrity culture
  • endorsement
  • controversy
  • normalization
  • self-esteem
  • body image
  • mental health
  • consumer behavior
  • social norms
  • economic trends
  • cultural trends
  • privacy
  • ethical concerns
  • social responsibility
  • platform
  • obsession
  • public behavior
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