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ou have seen an advertisement from a couple who live in an Australia. For someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter the couple, in your letter: explain why you think you would be suitable the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job

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Dear Sir /Madam, My name is Keyhan and I am writing to you regarding your advertisement that was published in the local newspaper on the 27th of April. As you need a person to teach Persian to your children and it is my native language and right now I am training a lot of students in the J&A school, so I think I will be able to help you in
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, I can design games for them to stimulate their creativity for better performance in the future which is somehow necessary these days. I live nearby so I can walk only 10 minutes to your home whenever you want and our schedules can be flexible as I am free all the afternoons. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely, Ebrahimi Keyhan

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To enhance the letter, consider providing more detailed examples of your teaching methods or how your experience has specifically prepared you for teaching their children.
coherence cohesion
It may be beneficial to structure the letter with a more explicit outline of what the job encompasses and how your skills directly align with those needs, thus providing a stronger argument for your suitability.
task achievement
Your letter effectively introduces your experience and expresses your enthusiasm for the job, which is crucial in making a strong case for your candidature.
coherence cohesion
The use of a clear greeting and closing adds a professional touch, which is commendable.
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