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Technology is being used more and more in education, discuss the advantages and disadvantages

#technology #education
Technology’s advantages in
education
 are numerous,
however
, the one we will be addressing here, is the easy
access
 and delivery of knowledge it provides; regarding the drawback, we will be tackling two disadvantages, first, the ease of
information
 might take away the interest in
education
 by
students
, and
second,
too much
information
 may
also
 overwhelm them. Thanks to technological devices like computers,
students
 and teachers can have
access
 to almost every piece of
information
 that has been already articulated by scholars, scientists, or researchers. E-books are a good example of technological upsides in
education
, as
in contrast
 with physical books, they are of low cost if not free,
besides
, can be read at any time as they are cellphones saved. Computers are
also
 used to reproduce real videos to explain,
for example
, problems, events, or procedures that are difficult to explain by words alone. On the flip side, easy
access
 to
information
 can lead
students
 to laziness, as when a thing gets too easy it loses its attractiveness, and considering that they might think that they do not need to learn anything, as on the internet with electronic devices they can look up whatever they need to know on the spot. In conclusion, the advantages of
education
 in
this
 paper are the easy
access
 to
information
 and the way how technology eases the delivery and
access
 to knowledge. Regarding the disadvantages, we believe that the same ease of
information
access
 may overwhelm
students
 and cause disinterest.
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Task Achievement
Expand your discussion by incorporating more detailed advantages and disadvantages, along with specific examples to support your arguments. This would enhance your task achievement score.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve your coherence and cohesion, try to link your ideas more clearly between paragraphs with transitional phrases that flow naturally. This will aid readers in following your argumentation seamlessly.
Task Response
You've done well in presenting both advantages and disadvantages of technology in education, which shows a balanced view.
Coherence & Cohesion
Including a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoints is a strong aspect of your essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • multimedia resources
  • online collaboration
  • virtual classrooms
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • learning management systems
  • adaptive learning
  • screen time
  • tech-savvy
  • cyberbullying
  • digital equity
  • edtech (educational technology)
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