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The use of social media ,such as Face book and Twitter ,is replacing face_to_face contact with people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #face #book #twitter #face_to_face #contact #people
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 the usage of social media,
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 considers that there are disadvantages outweigh
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the advantages. First of all, lack of
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 interaction. The author considers that social media only allows
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 to post photos, videos, and their opinions on the Internet. It may allow people to keep
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social distance
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communicaiton
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communication
 in a
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digital
 format but without any
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