The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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line graph illustrates the proportion of city dwellers in four ASEAN countries, including the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, between 1970 and 2020, with the expected

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in 2030 and 2040.

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, it is seen that all four countries have a dramatic rise in

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, starting at the lowest point in 1970 and being estimated to reach its peak in 2040. Indonesia and Malaysia have a slight increase in

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, respectively from about 12 to over 20 and from 30 to about 45 from 1970 to 1990.

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, the graphs of Indonesia and Malaysia have rapidly climbed until 2020.

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it is predicted to continue increasing and will reach its highest peak in 2040.

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, Thailand has had a gradual rise, which started from under 20 in 1970 and saw a slight change which

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ended at 30 in 2020. The Philippines

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showed the same trend as Thailand, which started at 30 in 1970 and had a slight increase in the next fifty years. Both countries are projected to climb in

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in two decades.

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