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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobs describe your new job tell him/her your other news

#work #company #friend #jobs #job #news
Dear
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, I’m writing to let you know that I got a new position in a new company. I changed my old job, which you know because it became so boring and it didn’t add any new skills to me two years ago.
Moreover
, they moved the location to a far place. But now with the new work, I am really thrilled because it is very close to my home.
In addition
, it boosts my language and computer skills.
Also
, it starts at 9:00 a.m. and ends at 5:00 p.m
as well as
 I
also
 have two days off a week. So, I can take care of myself and my family more.
Besides
,my co-workers are kind and helpful. Anyway, I have some good news I want to tell you about. I go to the gym near my home that helps in losing weight.
Also
, I gained my driver's licence
last
 summer and I can buy a car soon. All the best, amal
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure each paragraph smoothly transitions from one to the next for better flow. Use linking words effectively to enhance coherence.
task achievement
For an even higher task achievement score, consider adding more specific details about your new job to fully expand and explain its benefits and your responsibilities.
coherence cohesion
You’ve done a great job of organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct idea.
task achievement
Your tone is very suitable for an informal letter to a friend, making the writing feel personal and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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