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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, some academies provide online
courses
 for their learners with easy accessibility, the Internet
in particular
. In the following paragraphs, both the positive and the negative effects of
this
 idea will be outlined before a conclusion is reached. On the one hand, it is undeniable that online
courses
 hand opportunities to students who have been working already and want to start their postgraduate programs, but they cannot attend the classes during their work hours. Even if the
courses
 begin in the evening, after their day is off, the universities might be far away from their workplace, so they cannot arrive at the lessons on time. Online study is the crucial solution that can answer their needs.
For instance
, people in major cities mostly start their work at 8.00 AM and finish at 5.00 PM, meantime, their Master's degree course starts at 5.30 PM. During rush hours and when a lot of vehicles are on the road, they obviously cannot make time to arrive at the universities.
On the other hand
, some of the online
courses
 are recorded by their professors before the classes begin, which means learners cannot participate and interact with their teachers.
On the contrary
, in some live online classes, it is still hard for learners to study or ask questions as they are not face-to-face with their teachers,
such
 as students definitely cannot interrupt
while
 the professor is teaching, so they keep their questions in their minds and prepare it after the end of the session.
However
, after the class is done, the professor leaves the room immediately so that the students' questions are not being answered. All in all, it is a fact that studying via the Internet gives benefits to some people,
for example
, workers in downtowns. It
also
 brings negative impacts to them by losing their interaction with their classmates and the teachers.
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Task Achievement
Make sure to directly address whether you believe the development is positive or negative to better meet the task requirement.
Coherence & Cohesion
Incorporate more linking phrases to enhance the flow of ideas between paragraphs and sentences.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider a more structured conclusion that reinforces your stance with a brief summary of your main points.
Task Achievement
You provided a balanced view by discussing both the positives and negatives of online learning.
Task Achievement
Relevant, specific examples enhance the persuasiveness of your arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
Good use of an introductory paragraph to set the context of the discussion.
Coherence & Cohesion
The logical structure of your essay makes it easy to follow.

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