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The graph belowe shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph belowe shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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The line chart illustrates
median
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the median
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 carbon dioxide (CO2) outflows per individual in the four Europe countries
among
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between
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 1967 and 2007. The data declared that
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
was
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had
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 the highest rate of emissions,
in
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on
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 the other hand, Portugal
was
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had
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 the lowest one. The graph fluctuated from 1967 to 2007 for each
states
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state
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.
Although
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United
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the United
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 Kingdom had the
upper
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highest
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percentages
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percentage
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 of 11 % in 1967,
but
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the trend decreased each year until touched 9 % in 2007.
Converesly
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, Portugal had the lowest level of 1 % in 1967, but it
rised
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rose
 time by time until reached 5 % in 2007.
This
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 phenomenon
followed
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was followed
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 by Italy
which
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where
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 the ratio of emissions
shown
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showed
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increasing
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an increasing
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 number from 5 % in 1967
then
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 peaked at 7 % in 2007. The most successful story came from Sweden, the country had the ability to
declined
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 its CO2 discharges from 9 % in 1967,
then
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 dropped
at
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to
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 5 % in 2007.
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