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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
#information #consumer #items #five #countries
The table chart gives information
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the proportion of consumer expenditure in Ireland, Italy, Spain,
Sweden
 and
turkey
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 in three categories during 2002.
Overall
 the category of food and drink showed
the
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a
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 high trend,
whereas
 leisure and education
was
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were
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 less level in the diagram.
According to
 the
graph
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Turkey
 spent the most at 32,14
percentage
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per cent
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of
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on
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 food and drinks.
In
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Italy saw
also
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a high-rise
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high-rise
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high rise
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16.36
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of 16.36
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 and the percentage
of
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in
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Sweden
 is small at 15,77.
Sweden
 and Ireland consumed 15.77 and 28.91
percent
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per cent
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.
The
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Turkey
 the most of
clothing
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the clothing
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 and footwear items . The
Turkey
percent
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per cent
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 at 6.63. The expenditure of Spain and Ireland
showed
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also
 high
scored
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scores
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at 6.51 and 6.43. Italy
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was
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the
most high
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highest
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scored
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score
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of
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for
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 clothing and footwear
item
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items
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 at 9 %. Italy and
Sweden of
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Sweden's
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 leisure and education items
was
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had
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 similar trends. Spain saw
small
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a small
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 level.
The
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Turkey
 was
the
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high at 4.35.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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