The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
A glance at the diagram provides the process of making
sugar
.
Overall
, there 7 steps in the process which commences with the growth of sugar
canes and ends with drying and cooling before becoming sugar
.
According to
the information shown in the diagram, the growing period of sugar
canes
is 12 to 18 months.Fix the agreement mistake
cane
Moreover
, there are two harvesting ways as
one is by Correct word choice
apply
human
and the other is by machines.After harvesting, Fix the agreement mistake
humans
sugar
canes
will be crushed by equipment and Fix the agreement mistake
cane
turn
into juice.Afterwards, the juice will be purified by a limestone filter. Wrong verb form
turned
Then
, the purified juice will be heated by an evaporator to become syrup.After heating, the following precedure
is separating Correct your spelling
procedure
sugar
crystars
from syrup via a centrifuge.Correct your spelling
crystals
Finally
, sugar
crystats
turn into Correct your spelling
crystals
sugar
after drying and cooling.
To sum up
, it can be apparently seen that it takes more than a year to wait for the harvest of sugar
cans which is the longest part in
Change preposition
of
the
Correct article usage
apply
sugar
production.Submitted by s99104032 on
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