The pie charts below show the percentage of five types of food sold by a supermarket in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the percentage of five types of food sold by a supermarket in 2003 and 2013.
The round charts
gives
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information about the proportion of five different
food
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foods
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sold by a supermarket in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, in 2003, Vegetable was the highest seller among the five foods, and
Meat
and Seafood followed second and third sellers in
retails
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.
On the other hand
, after one decade,
Meat
became the highest seller surpassed by Vegetables.
In addition
, Fruits and
Eggs
increased the same percentage of selling amount after 10 years. Turning to the data in more detail, in 2003, Vegetables and
Meat
sold almost 45% of all foods proportion, and the figures at 25% and 21% respectively.
Moreover
,
Eggs
selling amount was at 20% and Seafood sold just 1% under compared to
Eggs
at
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in
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the same year. Looking
about
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more details, in 2013,
Meat
and Vegetables reversed their orders.
In addition
,
Fruits
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the Fruits
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and Seafood of percentages risen each 2%.
However
, the proportion of
Eggs
notably
decline
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declined
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under
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6%, so
Eggs
became the lowest seller in the same year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, eggs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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