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Band 5.5

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: •give details of your visit to the restaurant •explain the reason for the celebration •say what was good about the food and the service

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
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 letter to express my feelings about your restaurant I went there on Saturday night with my classmates.It was the most beautiful and comfortable restaurant I have ever seen. There were three floors and comfortable chairs.We really liked its dishes and cups.I want to go there again sometime in the future. We went there on Saturday night because we all were free and it was
anniversary
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the anniversary
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that
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when
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 we finished school ten years ago so all
of
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apply
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thirty of my classmates were there so l never forget that day.
Moreover
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,we liked your food and service.We ordered
two kilogram
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two-kilogram
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 palov and three portion kebabs.We ate them with appetite and l liked your service especially.All of your waiters were conscientious and
kindly
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kind
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.They tried to be liked by customers
as
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they can so they talked kindly
with
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to
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 customers and acted fast. I hope l will go there again in the future. Yours sincerely Laziz

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains one clear idea or point. The existing paragraphs are a mix of ideas that could be more effectively structured to enhance clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use more complex sentence structures and ensure that your ideas are logically connected with a variety of linking words. This will improve the flow of your writing.
Task Achievement
Expand on each of the bullet points given in the task with specific details, ensuring that you are responding completely to each aspect of the task. You could elaborate more on the details of the visit, the special occasion and provide specific examples of what was good about the food and service.
Task Achievement
Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter. Aim for a more formal tone appropriate for a letter to a restaurant manager, and avoid informal language.
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