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The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations.

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations.
The table provides key information about the highest growth in figures of
people
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 in China,
India
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 and the
USA
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. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table that China has the highest
population
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,
in addition
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,
India
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 showed an increase in
population
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 since 2017,
whereas
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 the
USA
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 took the lead for the highest Urban
population
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.
According to
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 what is shown, China showed an increase in the number of
people
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 since 2017 about +0.39%, and the density of
people
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 per square kilometre is 151.
While
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 the land area of the country is about 9.388 million kilometres, it had 58% of Urban
people
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. In terms of
India
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 and the
USA
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, the
population
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 in
India
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 is around 1.254 billion,
While
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 the US had the lowest amount under
third
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a third
the third
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.
However
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,
India
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 had the highest amount of
population
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 in 2017 at +1.11%,
whereas
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 the density by
people
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 in the
USA
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 showed a modest number of 35 kilometres.
In addition
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, it takes the lead in figures for Urban populations at 83%, approximately double
than
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that
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 of
India
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, india, usa, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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