The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

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The line graph provides data about how many patients

visits

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4 clinics of a hospital (birth control, eye, diabetic, dental) on

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average

in the years of 2010 and 2016.

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Single idea per paragraph

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The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

Your friend wants to visit your town. Write a letter to him giving information about the town. In your letter include : 1. what is the good time for visit? 2. describe some interesting places to visit 3. what accomodation is better for his stay?

In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Although glabalisation can be positive for some nations' economies, the negative impact on local communities should not be ignored. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is it a negative or positive development? Give your explanation using some relevant examples from your experience.

It is a better for student to live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents to what extent do you agree or disagree