The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

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The line graph illustrates changes in the possession of electrical appliances and time spent doing housework in households in a particular nation between 1920 to 2019.

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, it has an upward trend in ownership of washing machines, Refrigerators and vacuum cleaners.

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downward

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the downward

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trend towards hours spent on housework per week. The proportion of washing machines was 40 per

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in 1920 grew steadily to 60percent in 1940 and fluctuated between 1960 to 2000

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70 per

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, slightly

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over 72 per

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in the year 2019.

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, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners began at 0 and 30 per

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in the beginning and grew drastically till 2000 where reaching the highest point in the graph with 100 % and remain the unchanged end of the year 2019.

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,hours spent on housework every week for washing clothes , preparing meals and cleaning have declined trend. Individuals spent 50 % in the year 1920 and fell drastically to 20 % in 1960 ,slowly declining till 2019 settling

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above 10 %.

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ownership
electrical appliances
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time frame
variables
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significant milestones
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societal implications
quality of life
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